Cole,
I
really enjoyed reading your response to Hitchen’s article. It was well
organized, flowed easily, and I as your reader was able to understand
everything you were trying to communicate. In the first paragraph, you clearly
state your opinion that Hitchens had a convincing argument in your rhetorical
opinion. Your paragraph on ethos was well written. It pointed out how Hitchens
not only stated his side, but also allowed room for criticism in that people
might have argued that he wasn’t experiencing the full torture and helpless
feelings those might have knowing that they would be able to go back to their
own comfortable lives. I also agree with your commentary of Hitchen’s personal
candor, I enjoyed his use of that as well. Its also good that you quoted him
too. Your critique of his Pathos was well written as well. It true that his
vivid description of his experience makes that audience feel for him and he
gains our trust that way. Your conclusion brought everything to fruition and clearly
restated your thesis and the entirety of your response. Some things that I think
you could do to make your essay more informative. It is a little short. I would
elaborate more of your point and arguments. Go more in depth with your thoughts
and points, don’t just state your opinion, but tell us why, you know? Other
than that, if it was just based on quality not quantity as well, I’d have only
good things to say.
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